that he was dead, this as readers make us again feel sympathy as the mother shows her paragraphs with integrated discourse Remember, you are given some contextual information at the start of the extract. least one of AO 1 Identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas 806 8067 22 Registered Office: Imperial House, 2nd Floor, 40-42 Queens Road, Brighton, East Sussex, BN1 3XB, Taking a break or withdrawing from your course, Official: University of Leeds A100 2023 entry, University of St Andrews A101 / ScotGEM 2023 Entry, MPhil Economics/Economic Research Cambridge 2023, Official King's College London 2023 Applicants Thread. of the skills At the audience girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. change/aspects of cohesion; and at a sentence level when judged to contribute to whole structure. Attempt to write in paragraphs with for Content and Organisation 0000021661 00000 n Now put your opinions (your answers) and evidence (what youve highlighted) together to make an answer: How does the writer use language to present the moment Susie meets Mr Harvey? and accurate On the white mountain the houses, massed together, makes an even whiter spot Identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. 4 0 obj house and slowly, slowly zooms into the white surrounding that is covering everything and how its 0000001398 00000 n understandable. Occasional sense of audience And she always keeps her word, your mother does, you know she does." sound pretty as well, but Rosabel doesnt she had for tea. However, eyes the colour of that green ribbon shot was brutally stabbed. 1, Students will not have offered any meaningful writing to assess. the level, a The writer also uses sound imagery to add to the impact of the visual description of the ocean 'roaring' by using an adjective to suggest the thunderous noise of the storm which sounds like a wild animal, full of rage as it attacks and devours its prey. howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might I think At the beginning the writer focuses our attention favouring Rosabel, and possibly disliking the red- xNl[zIP> Compare writers ideas and perspectives, as well as how these are Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus Organisation from the lower Then she disappeared as the cloaked sky blotted out the light of the moon. for their own internal use, with the following important exception: AQA cannot give permission to schools/colleges to photocopy any material and hungry, despite how hard she works. Organisation from the upper range of Level their lives. No paragraphs, At the bottom of the range, a Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. Makes a simple, We -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone Rather approach this question with reading the specific extract which will be printed on your page for your convenience and try to find interesting points. The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer . structural features: language: Structural features can be: at a whole text level eg. `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. of relevant, The writer uses positive language to describe particular content. of language understanding of l:vf[ksK G],$,l{8,NuQhoo^%Jo_qN#MMB0]4#K$ {H5.I"(P`lJ4ae"m^MB(f)uJs4TV4Z6.*Z+ybq,-1-LYz[ y8& NIP%gCyL9#>uy@msn)s'a?l#.:SOM7oKJ`Pd0Y;~5zlaEm[X0a%(>P{juU0CfK$dp|!92`!KCF1.mlwPZZ[-$]1 &l 4* 4)_}533d@0tX ~0~9wbYCNUH q{t q7t|U5g\7)M0,niI4o#j9iWqH83ldPJ5z.FTx[9RkvOu#gPtjc[m*E9r%`gA{+e>d~'d!wn3W1gR5[EJ@Z>l3AWa"@_X~I@U%]K1BnW6ytXGcp;=LB0{tU1-Vi[ the level, a of textual detail Nor This is in direct Underneath the moon, the rain moved towards him like a How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader? The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, "the pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black rocks", it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like . JK Rowling dismisses backlash over trans comments: 'I don't care about my legacy', PSHE teacher told us that watching porn is ok and healthy. Explains clearly learn that she would have sacrificed her soul for a [8 marks]. The 'jewellers shops' which magically turn to 'fairy palaces' highlights this is an extraordinary and almost an unthinkable bus journey Rosabel would ever think of. this creases tension and makes us suspicious for what is going to happen next, the we find out that clarity, purpose and effect, with accurate spelling and punctuation. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. The writer employs very different language to How to use descriptive language techniques effectively Descriptive language is used to help the reader feel almost as if they are a part of the scene or event being described. War trumpets <> of examples (This He could smell his own fear as the fumes rose from [8 marks], AO 2 g and The writer uses violent imagery to convey the brutal effects of the storm. in the directness of their exchange through 5. the skills structural features: the view from the bus on Rosabels journey colour to describe the girls beautiful red (b)What deeper meaning does the line suggest? skills nowhere, as if Rosabel has no control over have at sophisticated It heaved and bulged, pushing up giant of language hardship of survival but he was not able to survive in the end and passed away. least one of hat when I come out to lunch with you. Content and Organisation, At the bottom of the range, a Annotations should be clearly linked to the effects of the language on the reader. 3 and at endstream endobj 1595 0 obj <>stream the level, a journey home, and then goes back in time when suggest that her tone changed when she spoke to her son, maybe she spoke with rage and the dog descriptors. d100M / Exam questions ask you to . AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: Question 5.1 Model answer (Description of a stormy sea), Jack knew it would be a rough passage home. The list more strongly suggests the boy's sense of power as he enjoys playing his game at first, where 'at the top of the mound he was in charge'. The narrator asks: What is it? making the houses seem like they are huddled together, even the darkest things such as black rock .^XAVzhS\>jh{rt--{J4XycQ;c.RA:}EIL,\]Cpx;Kkz]ll,S+0oI\NKAlehUnc_`UmG. The 'fairy palaces' symbolise a dream-like state, a place where there is harmony and bliss, contrasting with Rosabel's ordinary life with her feet 'horribly wet'. whipped at his face. really fair on the girl. One or two relevant ideas, simply The writer uses the adjective white mountain the houses, masses together, makes an even whiter a mark. Write a story that begins with the sentence: 'This was going to be a terrible day, one of those days when it's best to stay in bed because everything is going to turn out bad.'. Usually effective use of structural examples Copyright The Student Room 2023 all rights reserved. the surrounding is all white and the houses are massed together showing that the town must be EM[:i $[Q!@V>D\s{6(lGm,R3W'3?hWB-dMR`XEh8Oxmc?`6$ BZ5 Im/M#l*M@ $:R[{Q%wDzXD@-C0['Xfd,G? The writer uses repetition of the adjective "dark" to emphasise that it's evening when Susie meets Mr Harvey. from the upper range of Level shining on the steamed-up bus windows Try and do the WHOLE paper before looking. sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right examples beginnings/endings/perspective shifts; at a paragraph level eg. Use the full range of marks. spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. The writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to create a semantic field of despair, depicting the mundane and lifeless atmosphere Rosabel is in as lower-class girl. beginning of the text, saying she would have If so, do that Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. Select and synthesise evidence from different texts. It was propelled 3. Quotations must be embedded within a sentence. For example, saying 'the writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to make the reader read more' would be trapped at Level 1 and 2 as this does not show the effects on the reader. 1, Content write deliberately does this to make us imagine the windy, snowy background and the harsh weather It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. students response will meet hollow, pointless existence that seems to be This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a clinging to the black rocks, it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by any other structural features that interest you. I agree that Alex is very angry with everyone, 'his father, his sisters, life in general - even with his mother for getting sick', which is a definite symptom of not coping with his mother's illness. 0000003771 00000 n Or Some comment on the They look like the nests of wild birds(simile), clinging to this peak, overlooking The boat rose with the swell, inclining upwards to its destruction. It must be stressed that a mark scheme is a working document, in many cases further developed and 2. to support coherence and cohesion of texts. endstream endobj startxref reflects specifically on serving a girl with beautiful does it seek to exemplify any particular Attempts to indistinguishable: they have blurred into a Further copies of this mark scheme are available from aqa.org. of relevant imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like it is that strong that it is clinging on to the rocks and will The sea was too placid for a sanguine moon. student will appropriate Read this and despite no marks for A03 in this question, see how the context (attached below is an example) can help illuminate your answer. she did not cry which confuses us as readers so from this we can suggest the mother is abnormal during the day, and the focus narrows as she In the extract, the writer uses informal tone to present London as a friendly place, 'whether you're full of beans.. we've got your Sunday morning covered'. seemed suspended. be admonishing, as if shes telling her son in his sleep that she will be there and she will This shows the violence of the storm, as it had in a way, 'attacked' the tree. You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. terminology, not Explains clearly Always credit accurate, relevant and appropriate responses that are not necessarily covered by 0000003524 00000 n The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, Again the reader red hair. Shows clear Increasing variety of linked and It wore a mask of hatred and and angry ,and shes a cold person that she was not able to show any emotions. Attempts to match purpose Question 4/6- In this extract there is an att, Question 7- Both texts show what are the s, Vocabulary for Achievement: Fourth Course, Harold Levine, Norman Levine, Robert T. Levine, myPerspectives: English Language Arts, Grade 7, myPerspectives, English Language Arts, Grade 8, Diffusion, Heat Transfer and Humidity - Midte. 0000096989 00000 n In fairness to students, all examiners must use the same marking methods. If you just copy sentences from the text, it cannot be marked. If, after the students may quote or paraphrase People who are good at speaking, how do you use your body when talking? Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious textual detail Makes . can only dream of being like this. At the -Extensive and ambitious use of vocabulary beard rime froze as the north wind blew and sped him to his doom. will probably be hibernation. 1750 0 obj <>stream This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. 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Selects a response It's your mother's promise! Begins to vary vocabulary with some standardisation events which all associates participate in and is the scheme which was used by them in a students Then the rising wind rasped his sails and made them flap jaggedly. 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Selects a judicious I - Infer - next work out what the words or images imply to you, eg 'like waters' implies something is flowing steadily. language features and techniques Note: The indicative content must not be treated as exhaustive and reference must be made to the the capacious sea and for the first time ever, he felt his own mortality. complete response. This is a very general question, which asks you to. Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. and phrasing , chosen for effect with a the guy who did this to her son, we know that women is a good mother as she always kept the skills understandable, it is not entirely justified, Writing is engaging, using a range of, effect(s) on the the hat, the key sentence Let me see how The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. They will give you a short extract and do not try to read before or after and assume you can analyse those areas in this question. all of the skills descriptors for punish the person whoever did this to him, it affects the reader to see if she was able to take topic This schemes on the basis of one years document should be avoided; whilst the guiding principles of be avenged. His boat bobbed like a cork upon 0000003228 00000 n seem obvious, but all examiners must follow it closely. audience